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Life without a meaning by ~devilkrissie:icondevilkrissie:

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Your voice calls out my name;
I hear it in the distance …
Faintly crying for attention;
Deaf I am and numb to any emotions

I let you go forever in this abyss …
Your hands slip my grip!!
You fall in the endless dark …
Wrapped up in gruesome shadows

Hearing you loose life - leaving this reality;
Knowing I can’t do anything about it
Feeling somewhat useless – I cry … …
I long for your forgiveness and understanding

I wake up to the sound of rain clatters … …
I look endlessly for your presence beside me
I realize sadly it wasn’t just a bad dream
I feel alone in this cruel world!!

Hating myself for not taking your place!
Wishing for the shadows to engulf me with them;
To join you and protect you … …
All I have left here is nuisance!!

Cutting myself to feel your pain;
Blood oozing out of my open wounds…
My soul escapes with every drop -
I faint to the sound of our favourite band …

I fall on the floor lifeless;
Pale and rigid - eyes fixed in the same direction
I feel cold – yet,
I am happy…
                             Krissie 06/12/06
©2007-2009 ~devilkrissie
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life without you is not worth living - i had to join you!
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~Mazzi10:iconMazzi10: Nov 24, 2007, 7:06:47 PM
I like it a lot. It has a lot of meaning. Congratulations, you have a ton of writing skills!

:+favlove:

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I saw the angel in the marble and carved until I set him free.
-Michelangelo
~affirmation:iconaffirmation: Dec 31, 2007, 4:24:25 AM
When I read this one line would be almost a whisper and the next louder.. it doesn't work all the way through but maybe you could write it so it is that way? Have one line italic, whispering, and the next a bit more bold, as the overall poem is like being angry at yourself, going through more than one state of mind

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A reflection is the perception of what you want to believe
- Me
~devilkrissie:icondevilkrissie: Jan 2, 2008, 1:11:13 AM
well it is a bit of an angry poem yeah, so i can see what you mean. I must thank you for your comment and I m sure to keep what you said in mind - thanks again for your advice =)

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~affirmation:iconaffirmation: Jan 2, 2008, 5:26:13 AM
Wll I'm no expert, it was more of a suggestion =)

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A reflection is the perception of what you want to believe
- Me
~jemgi:iconjemgi: Feb 13, 2009, 1:48:57 AM
Why aren't I that good!

That's awesome!!!

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They put some warmth in your spirit
And a twinkle in your step,
When you sing there's an angel,
But your devil has been kept
For these nights where the sun still shine
Long after it has set.

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~Jemgi
~devilkrissie:icondevilkrissie: Feb 24, 2009, 1:15:16 PM
thanks a bunch ^_^ nd thanks for the +fave ^_^

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